Narration

My persuasive argument thesis is : Shutdown law is unnecessary in Korea

1. What do people already know about the topic?

They already know that game addiction is dangerous, expecially to teenagers, and the rate of the teeanger's game addiction in Korea is very high. Also a lot of people already heard about the 'shutdown law' because they are often in news, television and Internet, and the accidents caused by game addiction. However, they don't know the exact purpose and exact meaning of shutdown law and the real seriousness of Korean teenager's game addiction, also effects of it. Moreover, I will explain what is the game addiction exactly by using expert's opinion.

2. What research has already been done about my topic?

http://klawguru.com/2014/04/25/koreas-shutdown-law-found-constitutional/
 - explaing the exact meaning of shutdown law and the seriousness of game addiction in Korea.

http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2010/04/22/internet-addiction-target_n_547747.html
- The standard of game addiction, the seriousness of game addiction in Korea by explaining some examples of game addiction and the purpose of shutdown law.

http://www.theguardian.com/world/2010/jul/13/internet-addiction-south-korea
- The seriousness of game addiction, not just teenagers, but also all Koreans who are addicted to game (just for reference)



3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I'm right? What if I'm right and people ignore me?)
Shutdown law is not an efficient way to prevent teenagers from game addiction and there are many side effects because of that law. It is just a nominal law to show people that we are trying to do something for the problem of teenager's game addiction. If people ignore me,  they will realize someday that the governmnets did that law because just show people they do something and there are many possibilities that they just belive other laws are good that the government just did that for showing to people.


My Narration.

As I talked before, I don't think shutdown law is a good way to prevent teenagers from game addiction, and some people might think, what is the exact standard of game addiction, what is the 'shutdown law' exactly and what are the impacts of this law that cause a lot of arguments? Now I'll explain them in turn. According to Kim Tae-hoon, a psychiatrist who treats teenagers, "Internet addiction" may not be recognized as a medical condition or psychiatric disorder, but it often serves as a symptom of more serious underlying mental disorders such as attention deficit disorder and depression. As he said, the game addiction is kind of a symptom. Thus it is too ambiguous to say what is game addiction or not, but in this case I'll say game addiction persons are the people who are talked by experts that they are addicted to game.

 In korea, there are a lot of those teenagers who are addicted to game. According to Eo Gee-jun, president of the Korea Computer Life Institute, out of 10 adults and some 26 percent of teenagers are addicted gamers. Therefore to prevent those adolscents from serious game addiction, the govenment made a law called 'shutdwon law' which is often called 'cinderella law'. The 'Shutdown (System) Law' currently refers to Article 26 (Article 23.3 before the amendment) of the Juvenile Protection Act  which forbids internet game services providers from (knowingly) providing gaming services to juveniles younger than 16, from midnight to 06:00. This is why the law is sometimes called the 'Cinderella Law.'  The law was first enacted in 2011, shortly before the complaint was filed. Starting from 2012, the punishments kicked in. Such a violation is a crime. The maximum punishment for (knowingly) providing online gaming to a juvenile (during 00:00 – 06:00) is imprisonment for 2 years or a fine of 10,000,000 won. 

 Then, what are the impacts of this law? what are the diffirences before and after the law made? Of course, children who are younger that 16 cannot do game from midgniht to 06:00, and in some case it can protect them from game addiction. However, many effects appeared in other aspects. Many game developers and conpanies were worried that it could affect to game industry, badly. Also most of experts say that children try to find other way to do computer game. Thus now I'm going to explain why that 'shutdown law' is not a good way to prevent children from game addiction.